The one thing I have to say is that I love how you've focused on a younger and more vulnerable Lisa and didn't make her narration and thinking so childlike and immature. I can see the Lisa from canon who is a little softer and dependent on her brother in this. I also like how you've added some depth to Mick and Leonard's relationship in this. The Snart family is a complex and fascinating one, and it's nice to go back in time and see how Lisa and Leonard made their own family with Mick involved. Nice work!